I send e-mail for my host family

I send e-mail for my host family, but I can't receive them reply yet. I'm worried that my homestay life on this summer vacation. Were there bad points in this letter? Please tell me.

Dear my host family

　Hi, thank you for accepting me on this summer vacation. I’m deeply grateful to you! My name is Hiromi Shimozono.Please call me Hiromi.

Iwould like to know about your family. How many people are composed of yourfamily? My family is a father, a mother and younger sister. My father is Yoshihiro, he is an architect. My mother is Misuzu, she has a part time job. Mysister is Emi, she is a second grade high school student. She goes to the private girl’s high school. I go to Kumamoto Gakuen University. My parent’s house is in Miyazaki, but I live in Kumamoto alone now. So I am sad because I live apart from my family. I go to school in Kumamoto to study English hard.

What do you like to do? I like cooking, but I can’t cook very well. If I may, I’dlike to cook something with you. Please let me help housework with you. I’dlike to cook something Japanese dishes someday. As far as foods, I’m not fan ofperishables such as the liver, so if you served it, I couldn’t eat it. I’m sorry.

I’m looking forward to see your family, but I can’t speak English very well. So I’m worried that I can’t talk well with you, but I do my best. I’d like to know about your family. If you have time, please reply me. Thank you!!

From Hiromi 　（263/7015 words）

Pygmalion

 I studied “Pygmalion” written by George Bernard show, so I would like to write its impression.
  Higgins, a professor of phonetics who studies the dialect runs into Eliza selling flower on the downtown. Then, he betided on Eliza can be excellent Lady with his friend. He was charming without knowing it through training of phonetics.

 I watched this movie, I would like to state 2 points. One is the use of different words by the difference in social standing. Another is the influence of language in identity. 

 First, I would like to state the former. This had been affected by the background of the era. In this era, the ruling classes like that nobles and churchman had done a political marriage or politics in the international society over the country. So they can use the correct way of speaking to do good administration. However, the lower classes hadn’t had a chance to join their politics. So their language was affected by their lifestyle and characteristic of area. This is why, it’s no use causing by the way of speaking in each classes.

 Next, I would like to state the influence of language in identity. Are people who can use the way of the correct pronunciation, human greater and more excellent? Or, are people who can’t use it, inferior to others. In this movie, was she able to be great Lady to pronounce the correct way of language? I don’t think so. Making personality of Eliza is rather talking by using word that she can’t pronounce very well and was affected by own emotion than she uses word that she was instilled formal language and behave. If everyone behave formal and use perfect pronunciation word, they have only one identity and emotion.

 This is why, I think that people can’t express the genuine identity if they would use formal language and behave or became a perfect Lady. (316/6752 words)

Vacation plans

  I’m going to go abroad to study English for a month on this summer vacation. I have wanted to go abroad since I had studied English for the first time. So, I’m glad to grant my dream. My host family is Curl and Elizabeth. I send them e-mail, but I don’t receive their reply yet. So, I’m worried about my homestay life. But, I’ll try to talk them positively to get along with them. I can’t speak English fluently and don’t have enough English skill, so I must study English very hard for about a month until July 22th. I have a lot of uneasiness, but I’m looking forward to go to Minesota. (113/6436 words)

About blogging

 I wire blog by using English now. It is hard for me to write it because I have a part time job and I live alone in Kumamoto. So, I have always a lot of things to do and I don’t enough time to write it. However, I must write it to take 2 unites in WritingⅢ・Ⅳ. So, I write it while making use of a little bit time. I think that it is useful for me to improve my English skill by writing blog in English. I’m worried that I have written it without noticing any grammatical mistakes. So, I must check it while studying the correct grammar. (113/6323 words)

Essays 1-02c: you will enjoy about KGU life

We introduce my university. We commute to Kumamoto Gakuen University. There is in Kumamoto. It is the most biggest university in Kumamoto. 6631 people attend to go it. This is four departments, and the Faculty of Commercial Science and the Faculty of Economics and the Faculty of Foreign Languages and the Faculty of Social Welfare. There are fifteen course of study into four departments. There has many great teachers, they are specialist each field of study.



First, We would like to talk to you about Eibei Gakka. Eibei Gakka has various devices to improve our English skill. For example, ALC is learning word site. We study many word for it. It is interesting for us to remember about English word. Please you try it, so you will learn many words. Anything else, second year students in Eibei should write many essay and upload to blogger for us essay. We should write 10000 word in spring semester. We can’t it, but we learn great skill for writing.



Second, We teach you about English Lounge. The space is communicated with an international student and native speaker of instructor in English. Only the students manage English Lounge, and If you go to there, you should speak in English. You should not speak Japanese. It hold many event, for example Christmas party and Halloween party. You should do see a English Lounge. You can be to get along with many friends.



Third, Kumamoto Gakuen University has many good places. There are alot of places to eat foods and drinks. For example, Lawson, Bakery, student dining hall. We want to teach you Bakery. Bakery is in 12 center. I often go to there. We like there, because there are many kinds of bread. Our friends and we like bread. Our favorite bread is Mentai bread. It is very delicious. Do you know it? We want to eat it. If you eat it, you never forget its taste.



Fourth, we teach you student dining hall. It has a lot of various foods and drink. There are a lot of kinds of vending machines expect student dining hall menus. We often use there because we are looking forward to choose various foods. And then, price is much cheap for our student. So, it is easy for us to buy foods and drink in there. we like Tantanmen is the best in student dining hall menu. It is a little hot and moderate quantity for us. So we recommend girls too. Student dining hall is between Kenkyu-tou and Library.



Fifth, there are a lot of places to use PCs in this university. For example, library, e-campus center, PC’s rooms of 1 building and so on. So, all students have many chances to use PCs. we are always in trouble then because We don’t have a printing machine in our house when our classes’ professors gave us homework which has to use PC and print out it. But, there are a lot of places to use PC and a printing machine in this university, so We are always helped them. And, PCs in this university have all softs to useful for us to learn English, extracurricular class, many English dictionary and so on. These softs are very useful for us. We often use them. If we get a job, we would have many chances to use PCs to make a plan for our work. Please use places to use PCs for you in the future.





Sixth, We have favorite space in Kumamoto Gakuen University. This is a library. Our university's library is very wide. There are many books. We don't know what to have it. we can't read all books until graduation day. We will read anything in my power. We often go to there to study. The many of students make use of it during examination week. It was crowded packed to overflowing with students. We will go to there next examination days. The library is very silently, because all students want to read in a silently space. We hope it.



Seventh, there are many kind people in this university. When we are in trouble, people who are around us gave us some advices. We are belonging to Eibei Gakka, there are many kind people in Eibei Gakka. So We love them. We often plane girl’s party on about two months. So you don’t need to worry about human relationship. Probably, you can make good friends soon.



Eighth, everyone is good friends each other. We are also belonging to Circle.We like 8 center. That because there is in our friends. 8 center has circle's room. Our circle are a study group culture assets and a study group economic circle.All member are very kind too. Kumamoto University has many kind of circles. The 3 individual of a combination to circle and couture and Gakusho. We join Gakusho. I like Gakusho, beause many peoples kind of me. We are happy! Gakusho has many circles, for example, a study group hospitality and economy and marketing and children and society etc... We want to join Gausho. If you join in, you will get many friends.
　　
This is why, there are many good points in this university. But these are only a part of all. We want to talk food points in this university for you. We wish you send enjoyable days in this university.
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I co-authored this essay with Momoko. We used content from our previous, individual essay posts (1-02a-b).

Individual essay posts (1-02a-b)

Momoko's revised essay (2012.05.28)
Hiromi's revised essay (2012.05.23)

Here are links to each of our co-authored essays:

Joint essay posts (1-02c)

Momoko's joint essay (2012.06.21)
Hiromi's joint essay (2012.06.21)

About my Keitai

  I have used i-phone when I was a 3rd great high school student. I had had a keitai of Softbank but I bought i-phone because I think it is so cool that person using it. However I'm not good at using electric machines so I needed to have long time to handle i-phone. I can handle it than before. I think i-phone is very useful for my life than Keitai. I can know some information by using i-phone. I always use them and send my comfortable life than before. (89/5311 words)

BR:1-12 NARNIA -the lion, the Witch and the wardroe

“He asked Peter to help him lead the creatures of Narnia against the White Witch.”[p.27]

 I had watched movie of Narnia. I was able to feel the bonds of family through this movie. Pevensie brother could win the White Witch group and take back peace of Narnia because they fought the White Witch group while protecting and having one of the minds each other.

 I think that it is important to take care of family as partners have a lifetime together. So, I do my best for my family as I possible, if they would be trouble with something.

 In this story, I like Lucy. She is very cute and quite considerate for others. I like the most scenes is helping Mr. Thumus of her friend in spite of he betrayed her promise. I think she is a broad-minded person, so I respect her.

 I had ever watched all Narnia series. I like them. I want to watch them again because I read this story and it makes me such a feeling.

C.S. Lewis (2005) NARNIA –The lion, the witch and the wadore. UNITED STATEs: Harper Collins 
[185/5222 words]

BR 1-11:ALADDIN AND HIS MAGICAL LAMP

They had all they could wish for, so the lamp and a ring were left in drawer [p.46]

 I read this ALADDIN’s book for the first time, but I had watched ALADDIN of Disney movie. I think ALADDIN of movie is more interesting than that book. I like Jasmine. She is very cute and kind girl. She is the daughter of the royal family and Aladdin is a man of class citizens. In spite of they are different class, they fall in love with each other. I yearn for love like them.

 Recently, I think men and women don’t fall in love like Aladdin and Jasmine. I want to fall in love with someone like them. Also, I want this useful lamp and a ring. If I had them, I would use to go somewhere, want something etc. I think this story make me give some dreams.

Katie, Daynes (2007). Aladdin & His Magical Lamp. London, England: Usborne young reading 

[154/5037words]

BR 1-10:Cinderella

“Felicity flicked her wand and gave Cinderella a dress even more beautiful than one she had worm to the Bell.”[p.46]

 I read this story, I think everyone will have chance to succeed if they do their best. When I was a child, my mother read this story of Cinderella me and I watched Cinderella movie of Disney. I have liked now.

 I think all girls think that they want to be more beautiful than now. I think so too.

This story is all girls’ dream. Fantastic godmother make her wishes grant because Cinderella had done her best when her stepmother tormented her.

 I want to be like Cinderella but I must do my best everything to succeed my dream. I would like to study English harder than now and try something to be useful for my life and society.

Susanna, Davidson (2004). Cinderella. LONDON, England: Usborne Young Reading 

[144 words]

BR:1-09 Alice in Wonderland

“You shouldn’t waste time asking riddles with no answer, she snapped” [p.46]

 I like “Alice in wonderland”; Jonny Deep played the leading part in this movie in 2011. I like Jonny Deep and his performance is very great, I watched most of all movies which he played the leading part.

 Alice experienced some wondering experiences. For example, she joined never ending tea party, she became as giant or smaller and so on. I want to experience some wonderful experiences such as Alice.

Lewis, Carroll (2006). Alice in Wonderland. London, England: Usborne Young Reading [90/4883 words]

BR:1-08 Pinocchio

“Pinocchio gave Geppetto the gold coin and said I promise to be good from now on.”[p.29]

 When I watched this movie, “Pinocchio” for the first time, I was 8 years old. I don’t like lair person. I have many times that people told lie and I felt sad. There is nothing more important than not lying. Especially, lying makes people sad is the worst. So I try not to tell a lie others.

  Pinocchio is a liar boy, but he thinks that important for Geppetto. I felt good Pinocchio became a real boy because he promises to be good from now on.

 I think that it gives a lesson for all children telling are the worst thing.

Nicole, Taylor (2000). Pinocchio. Harlow, England: Young Reader

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BR:1-07 Sleeping Beauty

“Her eyes flickered open and Rose found herself face to face with prince of her dreams.”[p.44]

 When I read this story, I want to fall in love with someone and my heart was beating. If I were sleeping Beauty, I would fall in love with him such as her. This story makes all girls beating. Recently, most men are “Syousyoku-kei Danshi”, so I don’t like them. I like men who are cool, brave and honesty.  I think men should be cool, brave, honesty and gentle when I read this story.

Kate, Knighton (2006). Sleeping Beauty. London, England  Usborne Young Reading 

(97/4670 words)

Using computer

 I don’t like to use computers because I can’t basically use some machines. For example, I have i-phone now, but I don’t use it well, so I can’t use it well than other can use one better and like to use some machines. My father always use computer for his job, so I respect him. When I was taught by him how to use one someday, I don’t understand it. I can’t type first too. So I want to practice to use computers. (83/4573words)

ERC sophomore party

I’m belonging with Economic research circle. Some sophomore members of ERC held to go to dinner and Birthday party for Kyousuke at Party’z Bar on May 12^th.

 We assembled in front of PARCO at 19:00 and went to go there together. And then, we ate some course dishes and drank various drinks while talking many topics. Kyousuke’s birthday is May 12^th, so we planned to throw birthday cake his face and present for him another birthday cake. I was looking forward to do it. I thought everyone expect Kyousuke thought too.

 And then, everyone sang for him “Happy Birthday ~Kyousuke~”. I threw birthday cake his face. Just then, everyone were singing “Happy Birthday ~Hiromi~” while throwing Birthday cake my face. I was very surprised it. My birthday was April 8^th, so everyone planned that congratulate Kyousuke and I. When I headed it, I was very happy!! Everyone gave Kyousuke and me each birthday cake and presents. We ate them, they were very delicious!!

 Some members who have no business and have to go home went to Karaoke. I sang my favorite songs and I went home at a.m. 2:00.

 I had a very good time thanks to ERC members. I love them♡♡ I want to get along with them long times.(215/4490 words)

My favorite movies

My favorite movies are Pirates of the Caribbean series and Biohazard series.　I like Jonny Deep and Milla Jovovich. They are very cool and appear many movies as chat. I watched all their series. When I watched them, they make me excite feeling and I think I want to be like that them. If their new series will show, I’m going to go to Movie Theater to watch it. (70/4275 words)

BR:1-06 The Ugly Duckling

“You need some foods. My little friend”[p.20]

I read this story when I was a kindergartener. My mother read for me it.

 This story makes me think about around people’s cold. If someone was in trouble something, others should help him. But there weren’t kind people around an ugly duckling. It was very wrong. I experienced like that an ugly duckling. When I experienced like that things, I was very sad. I can’t believe around people. If someone is in trouble, others must help him because others are friend with him.

 I think people can’t live if there are no friends. There is nothing more important than friends.

Comeron, Fox (1969). The Ugly Duckling. Harlow, England: Young Reader  

[117/4205 words]

BR:1-05 Jack and the BEANSTALK

“He started to climb the beanstalk andclimbed quickly up and up and up to the sun and clouds.”[p.10]

 I read this book when I was third grade in elementary school. I think Jack is verykind boy for his mother. Climbing beanstalk and stealing some treasures were very dangerous for him, but he was not afraid doing them for his mother. It was correct that Jack gave the cow to an old man. Those things were hoping for many poor people in the world. I wish those things happen truly.

 I want to experience some mysterious experiences.This book’s picture is very cute, so it is easy for me to read

Bradsha, Carolyn. (1996). Jack and the Beanstalk. Harlow, England: Penguin Young Readers. 

[122/4188words]